Autobiography(1)---Draft Two
I am Szu-ping Huang, a sixteen-year-old active girl born in Chung-Hua. However, I grew up in Tainan. There are five people in my family. My father is a worker, my mother is an accountant, my elder brother is a college student, my younger brother is a junior high school student, and now I studying in Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School. I love the warm and fragrant family. It is deeply certain that I am lucky enough to grow in such a great family.I like to play basketball, volleyball, and computer games. I am good at sport. Now I am a member of the volleyball team, and I serve as a manager. Our team is united and earnest. I love all of members in the team, and I am also proud of them. On the other hand, I also like some quiet activities like listening songs and reading. The former helps me to relieve my pressure and the latter makes me become more artistic. My self expect is to be physical fit but also good in brain storming.
posted by [[ 我是_思,,* ]] @ 8:30 下午
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I am Szu-ping Huang, a sixteen-year-old active girl born in Chung-Hua. However, I grew up in Tainan. There are five people in my family. My father is a worker, my mother is an accountant, my elder brother is a college student, my younger brother is a junior high school student, and now I studying in Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School. I love my warm and fragrant family. It is deeply certain that I am lucky enough to grow in such a great family.
I am fond of playing basketball, volleyball and computer games. I am good at sport. Now I am a member of the school volleyball team, and I serve as a manager. Our team is united and earnest. I love all of members in this team, and I am also proud of them. On the other hand, I also like some quiet activities like listening songs and reading. The former helps me to relieve my pressure and the latter makes me become more artistic. (...)
* 第二段似乎缺了結尾句。
* 嘗試將簡單句連結成複合句。
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